Short Story Project

In this project we had to think of a learn Freytag's Pyramid, think of a theme and write a short story. My short story is based off of a book DOUBLE DATE. This is a Fear Street Book by R.L. Stine. This book is about a boy who has everything and a girl that likes him. he starts dating her but also starts dating her sister. AT THE SAME TIME! well they eventually they kill him. So i wrote a story that is based off of that.

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The next day all I could do was think of him! The date, the snails, the sand between my toes, the moon on the water, everything was just so… perfect! I couldn’t wait till Monday! He would wrap his arm around me and I would be his… GIRLFIREND. It sounded great to say it out loud!
“Girlfriend…Girlfriend…”
Ohmygosh! There he is. Don’t be too anxious. Don’t make it look obvious that you were thinking about him all weekend.
“Hi Jay.”
“I’m sorry, have we met?”
My heart broke into a million pieces. He walked past and all his friends laughed, and high-fived him. How could he do this to me? Running to the bathroom tears started running down my face. What could I have done to make him so mad at me? There was no one in the bathroom but it seemed so full and loud. I felt like I couldn’t breath, like someone was sitting on my chest and they were having fun watching me suffocate. I looked at myself in the mirror I didn’t like what I saw! It was u-g-l-y Julie. It was a girl who fell for a guy she never had a chance with! I walk alone in the hall and hear my sniffles. I walk and hear distant laughing in the back; just yesterday I thought that that would be me and Jay. All my teachers asked what was wrong, all I said was, “Its not important.” But in reality it was breaking me up inside.